First Cut

Above is the first cut of our coursework and below is our own self-assessment of our work.

Camera:

• We haven't included an establishing shot therefore the audience is unaware of the location and environment so we'll have to shoot this in a re-shoot.
• The tilt-up of the camera we use near the beginning isn't smooth and is unprofessional and therefore needs to be re-shot.
• Overall we need to include more POV shots to bring the audience into the diegesis and connect with our protagonist, but the POV we have used in the flashback needs to be re-considered because it would be better if we could see the protagonists reaction in the flashback. 
• In some of the shots the camera isn't positioned correctly and the body of our actress gets in the way of the shot casuing the audience to not see her actions.
• The drawing of the boy needs a longer, and closer close-up shot to ensure the audience has time to see exactly what is on the drawing. 
• The ending of the final shot is too random and unexpected therefore, we will need to adapt this in order to fit our narrative better.

Editing/Titles/Transitions

• The overall titles we have used are good, clear and a suitable length of time and we are therefore pleased with the effective simpleness of them.
• We have a reasonable amount of transitions which break up the narrative in a positively, effective way which we are also content with.
• Overall, our editing is smooth and shows good continuity and this is something we need to continue after our re-shoot for our final product.

Mise-en-scene

• We wanted to use low-key lighting however, our lighting ended up being too natural and light so we may want to consider this when we re-shoot. 
• Overall the costume and make-up we used on our protagonist was suitable and added to as well as reinforced her character in the narrative. 
• The framing of some of our shots was sometimes not straight, and there were a few times when our protagonist was marginalised and not centralised. 
• Finally, her walk over to the desk after drinking the alcohol and having the flashback is too sober and her overall acting needs to be more 'drunk'.

Sound

• Our use of diegetic sound is clear, parallel and appropriate to the scenes which is good.
• Furthermore, the use of our non-diegetic score is also appropriate however, we need to find another piece of music for the ending of our product which has a faster pace and will help build-up and reinforce the narrative.